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Beautiful..
her voice sounds, eyes like an angel.
Her beautiful soul that she opened up and
showed me her anger, her pain, her joy,
her blames, and with all these traits
she shined a light on my world.

We may be done but in my heart
she'll shine on.


White lines
They walk on white lines throat feels
sour i am your flower. You cry as i walk
on my white line thinking it'll take my life,
but i'll try to block it because you'd cry if
one of my petals died. Over these years, my
petals have gone from red to black. Have you noticed?
I have been fed with energy and life as my mind
decays. Fade, fading away. Oh how i need to escape.
Fade, fading away..my life goes another way.
Fade, fading away.
They walk on white lines throat feels
sour i am your flower. You cry as i walk
on my white line thinking it'll take my life.



Inhale
Smoke, inhale, erase.
Smoke, inhale, escape
my thoughts, my head,
this body i'm fed with pain.
They take my name
smoke, inhale, erase,
smoke, inhale, escape.
They throw it around and i
dont want to be found. Your
pointing pokes me on the sides,
i dont cry but ignore your words
go forth into the air and i see my name
scattered everywhere. Your words
shadder my pride, i wont cry but ignore.
Smoke, inhale, erase.
Smoke, inhale, escape.




Sorry, my spelling can be bad at times. Well anyway, im new at posting on here so if i did anything wrong please notify me. I'll post more later i guess?
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PostFri Jul 21, 2006 4:15 pm
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Sun shines across her face
tears appear but can't escape
she erases her memory so
no one can ask "are you okay?"
Sun shines across her face
A smile appears on her face
Hiding, she is...
Crying, she is...
Screaming, she is...
Smiling, she is beautiful.




Crime I've Done

Crime, i've done.
Guilt, i have. Joy, i want.
Happiness, i need.

Dear mind,
Can you help me succeed? Or will you seek the darkness that we're living? Will you erase memories and kill me?

Dear mind,
I've commited a crime, guilt shows, joy is nowhere to be found, happiness from the high. Dear mind, did you know that darkness calls your name? I tell you to ignore it, ignore it for my sake. Do this for my sake atleast.
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Everlasting Mask

Carved feelings seemed to be shaped. Hard welling to let go of the darkness in your eyes. You sound so everlasting when you say "I'm alright." Down right dreadful day, no escape. No escape.. You look between darkness and light and stand out of sight hoping that no one can find you but lady let me remind you, i hear your screams, they are calling to me, you are calling to me.
I hear you lady, i hear your screams.
I see your talents that no one seems to recognize.
Talent for poetry that cures your sadness, talents for
peace and forgiveness that restore your happiness.
Happiness which was destroyed in our innocent years,
and created a little girl who held our world. She hid behind
this mask, which covered her deep sorrows and pain that
she couldn't explain. And now you look between darkness and light,
standing out of sight, hoping that no one will find you.


But lady let me remind you.



There's a glitch in her head
nothing said, mother has left.
Feelings for death are renewed
by this hour. She's so sour in a world
that dissidents live to run and hide
they grew upon her... her..
her...though she ran on but her
heart became crippled the glitch
in her head grew larger, now shows
no emotion, this is her future.




More to come soon!.


Much love,
Taty

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I will post more later when my mom isnt around..
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Promises said, now all i feel is dread. I'm locked up
in a different world with people just like me. Should
make friends, and make this place look pretty so when
a newcomer comes they won't feel the dread like we did,
on top of pain. They've prob. seen what we have but now
they should feel welcome into this new world full of
flowers, candy, happiness, and weirdness making willy wonka
look like shit. I feel alive but it's too good to be true. Now i realize
im with the goddess in our kind of heaven. She helped me see
what was needed, what was best. I think she heard me crying,
she has helped me. She has kept her promises and i've kept mine.
I'll keep her a secret until the newcomers realize of her presences.
They'll feel alive, happy, and spill their secrets just like we did.
They'll cry and say every lie they've told. And we'll see how
hurt they were. They were. Now they are spinning free, just like we did.
It's a beautiful sight. Tides of sinful souls washing away cleansing
their bodies, they lay upon a floor and i am so sure that they
are ready. Our circle is opened, we stand unbroken. We have the
face of the earth in our hands and pray to the goddess to tell us
what lies ahead. The goddess answers our pray:

"You shall know the truth."
"Your dead."


Surprisingly i still see flowers, candy, happiness, and weirdness
and then i look at the world i once lived and prayed for them
to get better, maybe not in the way that we did. Now i feel
guilt for leaving my loved ones behind but the pains leaves my
soul before i can recognize it. And i believe they'll get better
yeah they'll get better, just like we did.
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I'm sorry I didn't reply earlier. I really like your poems, I like how I can get lots of different meanings out of them even though they all seem to be telling a story. Smile Great, please post more.
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Carried my heart throughout time,
you showed me love i showed you
life. There were times where we
brought eachother down like a high
but was worth the time. Then as she
conquered my heart and fell down not
realizing i had conquered her too and
there she sat right next to me, seeming
so beautifully.

[ the end. ]



Part One.
Hollow me out like a piece of clay.
I hang out dried and your eyes
are fixed on my internal organs
which hang in mid air on a clothing
line. The wind blows on my bare
skin and i heard a cry, maybe its
all in my mind or maybe it's just the
whistling in my head, everythings
left unsaid. My skin becomes dry
to my hollowed inside.


Part Two.
You've happened to be in my dreams ,
it bothers me. The fact that i can't have you
strangles my insides and i know that sounds
out of place but its what goes through my mind.
And i cant seem to find the place, will i ever
be happy again?

My heart hangs on that clothing lin, it calls your name.
Thriving you, hauling you, i need you, i want you.
I cant have you, wont. Now i throw myself off
of this clothing line and i'll try to stand on my own
again , and if i fall again you would probabley have
forgotten me.
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Maraja wrote:
I'm sorry I didn't reply earlier. I really like your poems, I like how I can get lots of different meanings out of them even though they all seem to be telling a story. Smile Great, please post more.



Thank you Smile Yeah i dont know.. i love writing poetry.
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Brought woman to shame tearing
their skins apart, i choke at the
sight of hurt. I take in worse
attendency then meant to. I see
your light on me shining so
furiously; i turn to look at thee.
"Tell me what you see."
"I see blindness, kindness,
willingness, and sacredecy of
a scared being. Me."




She lowered her voice, eyes closed.
Hand rapped in another. She has fallen
and can't get up; i look at you and
you say 'it's not your fault!'
Then you look at me and give me
a face that shows me glory but i
just look around and that shows
you pain and all i can do now is
rest my head upon your shoulder
and watch the world die with us.




Prowling through the night and
they called upon my name what
i've once tried to ignore is following
me now. I cant see how i've made these
mistakes, rain pours down on my face
leaving me looking up at the sky, asking
challenging questions why? Why have i been
picked upon to torture and lie and all you do is
open my hand, with the world standing still,
you place two pills to futurely rest in my mouth.
I look down at them and think, atleast there are
only two. Two of which make me happy place
and leave my questions unanswered everyday.




I'm Trying

I cant seem to forget this golden light.
They've showed me love, i've showed them life.
Oh how i wish i could let go, but the truth is i feel
my hands have been glued to you. Every minute
of the day, i tug away but dont seem to get anywhere.
Did you know as i think of you, all the memories of us
play like a pop song you can't get out of your head
and just for that i smile and frown knowing this feeling
wont go away so easily. Why did we do the things we did?
Why did i meet you? I'm not saying my life would've
been better without you, cause honestly it wouldn't have.
I've experienced so much in these past months than i have
in years. Yeah sure i have knee problems but what we had
hurt me worse than collapsing. And on that day, that last day
i felt like i was numb then later it hit me. I felt as if i was being
punched in the heart and i now know that you felt that way too.
But after awhile i realized that it was for the good, thus a lot of
pain, we needed to seperate. You needed to be more open to
other people and so did i. Well i hope your happy( and i mean
that truthfully. )


Even if my heart is still hurting, just wanted to let you
know that im trying.
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Silenced, no fury. Raw feelings.
Heartbeats as a earthquake hits,
and we're no where near this
tragic monster. Caged up, are you?
With me? We collide into the
same mind, think alike. Sometimes
my fear is of you hearing my
thoughts, i try to ignore them
and go forth like what i was
thinking wasn't you. If you can
hear me, you'll know that i hear
you too. People can see what
you dont, what i do. They ask us
questions or dont give in at all.
They can see what goes on
between us, when you cant at all.
Ignoring is the special trick of
not getting hurt by someone,
though your hurting yourself
and we're no where near this
tragic monster, are we?
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Severe in the mind thinking
that this one will come to her
so easily. Sick in the thoughts
that bring us down for caring.
Remembering is the key, caring
can hurt. Now i disappear and
you dont remember i was ever there.
My shadows dance upon you, im
sneaking away, im slipping away
just like the rest. I dont have courage
to lift me up and my hand is nearwell
gone. I can't fight myself anymore,
i cant fight you. I can see love in
the future, why dont you allow it too.
Why can others get away so
beautifully and i sit here in the depths
of my thoughts wondering how i will
get through it today. Consider my
questions, answers mean nothing now.
Actions care less for me...Now go to
sleep, i will stay awake in the mist of
my dreams.

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I like it a lot. I'm not good with words, I can't explain why I like it. But I wonder if I wouldn't like it more if you typed it out in the "traditional" way.

You know...

Severe in the mind thinking
That this one will come to her so easily
Sick in the thoughts
That bring us down for caring
Remembering is the key,
Caring can hurt
Now I disappear,
And you don't remember
I was ever there


etc

I just like reading it better that way, but of course it's just a suggestion. Smile
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i kind of think that writing it that way...means something...i mean if it doesn't why write it that way?...i find it interesting...the writing like that kind of droves attention to certain parts...maybe that's the intention...and i think it causes some sort of flow, is it the other way around? lol...i don't know lol...well my opinion... You Rock me likie Grin lol
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Thank you The SL Syndrome and Maraja!
I like the suggestions and feedback, i will put it in italic form and maybe bold or something and you guys can tell me if it looks cooler. Grin





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Oh I didn't mean that you should put it in italics, I was referring to when you start a new line of the poem. You do it in the middle of "sentances". And I was wondering if you have a specific purpose for this or just do it..
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Maraja wrote:
Oh I didn't mean that you should put it in italics, I was referring to when you start a new line of the poem. You do it in the middle of "sentances". And I was wondering if you have a specific purpose for this or just do it..



Ohh well i've just always done that, i mean there might be a meaning for it in the back of my head but right now i dont think there is one lol. Sorry.. i get confused sometimes.
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Cold in what she does, i hand
my heart to the air thinking someone
would be there. Thinking maybe
the people around me would
stop with the drama and realize
what im loosing. A war which can
only be fought by myself. A love
interest that can only be forgotten
when i let go. Please let go. I
have a hand now, who likes me
in everyway. But i want her hand
to comfort me. I will comfort her.
Now he has taken my heart, and
leads me with his hand. I can't help
but look back and see her in the
middle of nowhere..snow falling. I
just want to crawl into a hole and hide.
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His Soul. Her Voices.


She hears voices
in her head.
He doesn't love us
even when he says.
We tell her we love
her even when she
cant hear us calling
out to her.
He doesn't seem to
care. Good thing we're
not there.
She listens to the voices
in her head, which
leaves her in great pain.
Oh how i wish i
could make that change.
Sometimes i can
feel him cry, he's
still apart of my heart
even if i've tried..
tried to seperate from him,
but it could never work..
He isn't here for me,
but he's what i need.
I need him so badly..
She lifts a great
weight and still juggles
my mistakes.
All the time, i feel
like he's not here..
but in my heart
he truely cares.
I told him, the other day, that
i needed to back away.
I can't talk to him now..
I wonder if that is another
mistake..
Though they leave me
in pain, i feel that
i could never blame.
I could never blame.
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Hmm bisexual problems? Tongue I thought I had already replied to the other one but apparently I hadn't. i thought that one was good... That one is better because it creates more vivid images in my head. Smile
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Maraja wrote:
Hmm bisexual problems? Tongue I thought I had already replied to the other one but apparently I hadn't. i thought that one was good... That one is better because it creates more vivid images in my head. Smile


*edit*
I guess you could say that lol.
Oh wait, bisexual problems for the first poem or second one? lol
cause the second one is about my mother and father.
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Crawling Into Trouble


I look into the mirror, and feel my insdes changing.
I'm confused with who i really am and why i am here.
Why i act the way i do, i dont know. But it's pathetic.
A new world, i feel i am entering. People ask me for
help and my words of comfort are locked in my heart.
They used to rise and flow out of my mouth but some-
thing must've happened. I seem so cheery but i am
fucked. I seem so lovable and content when the first is
deep down, only few have seen it yet. Cradle with me,
hit the walls and now you'll realize flaws are written on
me. Everywhere. Now look, you can't see me. Because
i dont want you to, but then i do. I want the world to see
that im as scared as the girl next to me. I want people to
see that i mean well, when i can't even say it. Now im
crawling into trouble. Emotionally more than physically.
What has taken over me? I can imagine in my mind, that
i am in a tunnel and it is small. I am crawling into trouble.
All around me is darkness, and only few make it bright.
One in particular that cant seem to forget. Let go. Forget.
Will let go. And then i'll be free, and the girl next to me.
My sister, she'll be free from the nagging. From the pain
i put her through, thats why im such a bad sister.. see
i told you. Everytime shes in pain, i walk away. Now i
realize its because i can't bare it anymore. I know i cant
help her but if i could, i would make her life a shining star.
But i cant. She sits in a room locked with art, and i cant
seem to get her out. I dont think she can either. But we all
need to get away before we get to the end of the tunnel.
Because, right now, im crawling into trouble.
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i have no words lol...just wow...i could really feel your words, so i think what you wrote is pretty amazing...it's great...
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Thanks SL Syndrome ..Yeah i think i've gotten alot of wows from that poem which makes me feel pretty good to tell you the truth. lol.. im leaving people speechless for once. Anyway heres another one.




Cross lands

So summer fell, we crossed land into
natures spell of the dying and lived of
the spectacular. We faced the unfor-
giving and held our heads. We walked
past the spell only to be tied down by
reality. It felt as if where we were
died and never came back again.
As if the beauty had disappeared
and the mountains collapsed but no
it wasn't that. It was the wind we
traveled in to come back to our
'homeland'. But this isnt my home,
this is my cage. Everyone is caged
but no one else realizes. Everyone is
dying but no one else sees. Everyone is
mesmerized about the feeling of
being mighty, like you and me. But
summer fell and we crossed lands.
We fell inlove with natures plans.
We weren't caged, or atleast i wasn't.
The mountains had freed me, so did
the air. The sun boiled my skin but
i still enjoyed it. The warmth of
knowing you were there helped me out.
So thank you nature, thank you friend.
Now im ready to cross lands.
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Smile I really really like it. I love nature and the mention of it in poems.. and you did it brilliantly. Crossing lands... just those words... so beautiful. *Dies*
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Maraja wrote:
Smile I really really like it. I love nature and the mention of it in poems.. and you did it brilliantly. Crossing lands... just those words... so beautiful. *Dies*



Thank you, that made my day! Smile And yeah i love nature mentioned in poetry too.. this poem was about how i got to go to Idaho to see a friend and how beautiful it is there.. i mean with the mountains and literally everything.. no matter how much i hate the sun and how hot it was.. it was so beautiful.. more beautiful then MD will ever be. lol
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It's funny how the light glows.
It's beauty that helps the wind blow,
cold as she is, she stood without a
jacket in the brizzy weather.
Everyone stopped to look but only
for a second. They walked as if life
was the speed of light and she watched them,
slowly fading into the hazy night.
She stood there and held her arms out
as the wind hit her. It was a mixture of
guilt, pain, and beauty which soon traveled
throughout her body. Before she could interfere,
the girl screamed. Screamed as if no one could
hear but it was true, no one could hear.
They would still stop for a second or more but
soon they'd be gone and with that she realized
the world is what you make it. So is life and now
she wonders what she wants to make of it.
It's funny how the light glows.
It's beauty that helps the wind blow,
cold as she is, she stood without a
clue in the brizzy weather.
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I just finished reading your poems and I simply had to shout out a huge "THANK YOU" for the wonderful imagery and beauty you have unleashed in your writing. You have a smooth and very realistic touch that pulls on the heart strings and tugs at the mind, each poem had its own individual flow and uniqueness. An absolute delight reading them. Grin You should definatly do something with your talent, its just simply marverlous! Thumb *stands up and applauds you*
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i just adore those poems Smile i agree, amazing talent. Grin nature mentioned in poems is beautigul, you have done realy well. Hug
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Thank you so much Vickie and Shyqueen ...Your comments really meant a lot to me. I mean really. Thank you again!
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i agree with both of them...
you simply rock! Grin
You Rock Smile
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The SL Syndrome wrote:
i agree with both of them...
you simply rock! Grin
You Rock Smile


Aww thank you! What is your name by the way? Mine is Taty. Smile
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October the 23rd


Fifteen candles were spread out on a cake.
The cake consist of vanilla ice cream on the inside;
chocolate icing on the outside.
"Make a wish!" They all bluthered out.
The girl looked around to see eyes poking at her.
She felt weird for the attention she was getting,
not that she was neglicted.
'It is my day i guess..' she blew out the candles
with such force and power. The flames were destroyed
and smoke filled the air. People started to
cough everywhere. The girl looked at all of them
and mumbled 'i wished that you would all get better.. without me'.
As she said that, another girl reached out to grab her hand
but the birthday girl was gone. Smoke crept around them
and haunted them, reminding them of what this girl was
capable of. She made two wishes, not only for them to
get better without her but for her to be gone.. on October
the 23rd.






I think i might write one later if i get the chance

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In my opinion, that one was a little bit creepy. I like your writing though. As I've said earlier, they're almost all telling a little story about something happening. I never know how to express what I feel when I read your poems, but the imagery is great. Well, you know what I feel when I read your poems? I just figured it out. I feel like I want to make a matching picture, matching music.. because it's beautiful. Smile But I can't.
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Maraja wrote:
In my opinion, that one was a little bit creepy. I like your writing though. As I've said earlier, they're almost all telling a little story about something happening. I never know how to express what I feel when I read your poems, but the imagery is great. Well, you know what I feel when I read your poems? I just figured it out. I feel like I want to make a matching picture, matching music.. because it's beautiful. Smile But I can't.



Thank you, lol.. Yeah i guess it was in a way but eh. Usually when i write my poems, i picture them in my head as if they were scenes in movies that were really good and clear..Anyway... Here are two more i wrote the other day:

(You come in, fall out) Dead

Thrown into this world, i walk the path of death.
Planning, solving, another world, another me.
The mountain seperates my life, i fall both ways.
Life cant keep its grip anymore. They ignore me.
We walk, i fall behind and try to find myself.
Staring at random objects, i find my way to death.
I found my way. I came in, falling out. Dead.


Angel Dust
......PCP, i will try, try to cry. Lets go in
a field full of fairies and scream 'we dont believe'.
Will the world finally die? Will they all finally see the
resemblence of fear, it reflects in my eyes.
Eyes of no color til night where i hide in a cave
shaped of stars, the moon is there but nothing shines
on me. This isn't me the other half tells the rest but
no one hears. Ears plugged like our eyes, no one
dies.





I feel like the second poem is contridicting the first one.. eh.. oh well i will fix it later, keep telling me what you think! I love feedback.
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So miss may i take your hand?
Lead you to the door behind my
heart? Should i let the world spin
infront of me? Should i be happy?
Should this be real, when it doesnt
feel like it? Should i forget about you?
And how you make me feel. You've
asked why anyone should like you
many times. You've asked and i've
never given an answer, not one.
Inorder to do that, i had to open myself
to the question and make myself
realize im not over you. But you want
the answer, do you? You've given me
the feeling of beauty again, something
shines about you. Your inner-beauty.
Yeah your gorgeous, but when i look
at you, i see the qualities of peace .
I see your bravery, and something many
people desire. They desire your love
in your hand but they'd have to unlock you
first. Your a closed case without meaning to
be in someways, you seem to think its hard
to see the light of day shine on your heart
because you hide and hurt. Scared, you are
for not letting anyone hold your hand with love.
You reckon if you hold yourself back, you wont
fall but you've been falling. Somehow i think
i've held you in the air so you wont hit the ground.
Somehow i know that there is something more
deep down that i will dig to in a matter of time.
Somehow i've realized the mysterious ways you
go upon. Somehow i see that words cant always
explain what you want them to. So miss may i take
your heart and your hand to somehow show you
where the love is?
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bump, i neeeeeeeeeda write!
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Yeah you do. Pretty sure I nominated you for the 'Favorite poet' category for the Tatu.us awards. Wink
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Maraja wrote:
Yeah you do. Pretty sure I nominated you for the 'Favorite poet' category for the Tatu.us awards. Wink



I read this earlier but i had to go, i just want you to know that that made my day. Thank you=].
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heartshapedtaty wrote:
I read this earlier but i had to go, i just want you to know that that made my day. Thank you=].

Smile I hope you have sent in nominations as well, that way you have the chance to make someone happy too. :D

Musical Notes definitely makes me want to put on some good trance music. I wonder what music you were referring to, I immediately thought of trance. In either case, I really liked Invisible Cloaks too. "It first started off as a
innocent trick to see who cared but now everytime we're in pain the cloaks dawn on us". Excellent..

It was good to read! Thumb
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